Your series just gets better and better. Love the effort put into this! :)
Your series just gets better and better. Love the effort put into this! :)
Thanks for continuing to watch ShaeGuy!
That was pretty great. The animation and the line-work is pretty good, and the humor is funny. Made me laugh at the end lol. Keep up the good work!
Thanks man !
I'll give you 2/5 for the effort that was put into this at least, but this has problems:
1. If you really want to work with stop-motion I highly recommend you use objects such as clay, legos, or anything that can move its arms and legs around. Using random objects that cannot move anything around isn't really a good idea. It's all about giving the illusion of your characters being alive.
2. Try to get a microphone for voice acting instead of just using written paper for dialogue. Or at least try to get voice actors that can help you. There are plenty on Newgrounds that can give a helping hand.
3. I recommend swivel so your stop-motion video is not on loop. It's free so it should be no problem to get.
4. When it comes to stop-motion, it is very important to keep everybody out of the frames period. So if there is even so much as a human thumb in the frames, it will ruin the experience of the video. Unless if it's part of the story or something, there is no excuse for it.
5. Sort of a nit-pick, but the frames in the video are going too fast. Either add more frames to make the stop-motion smoother, or slow it down some.
Now don't think I'm hating on you. I'm only giving out constructive criticism because I know you have potential to make something great. Please take my advice and try to improve. And I know you can improve seeing the energy that was put into making this. Good luck!
Points taken but the fact is it all all came all of a sudden , which is why i could make it in lesser time , a clay animation would have took more time. Collab would have taken more time.Swivel isnt compatible on either of my computers.It was made in Ipad ,so still figuring out how to make it better the next time , and moreover the place i live in , I have seriously nobody from the same domain who can understand the values from the direction point of view, my mother helped me , I mean.Making it without any possible serious help , i must say it was very very frustating to see those occuring bodies in the frame, I am not whining but the truth is it was a pain in the ass to make this
It was pretty legit for something basic. Although I do recommend swivel so the animation is not on loop. It's free so it should be no problem to get. And I recommend you make videos longer than this, or at least put really short videos in the dumping grounds. The dumping grounds is the button next to your message button.
I HAVE swivel. I just wanted it to be a vector animation.
That was pretty funny lol. Especially love the part with the old guy and the kid. I can see why "dark" was one of your tags xD. But anyway, the animation was legit for the style you're going for, the art was pretty impressive, and again this was really funny! Keep up the great work! :)
Thanks a bunch for really digging the whole thing. The old guy and his poor son always make me laugh. Ha ha. Yah I feel this animation style is really the only way to pump out sorta longer episodes, which really still take quite a bit of time... But oh well, It's still making progress. Thanks again.
It was pretty good for a college project. Very cute indeed. I hope everybody involve continues to keep working hard and make something amazing in the near future! :)
Thanks! We've already had 1 member of the team graduate last year, and most of the remaining members will be graduating this school year, so I'm sure they will!
Got a good looking tablet there! lol
But yeah, looking forward to your tips and such. I know plenty of animators that are just starting out, and you can show them a few things. :)
thanks m9
I will admit I appreciate the fact you're open to criticism as most folks are not. So with that said, obviously this has problems:
1. Nothing really felt authentic with the art in general. Almost everything seemed like it was nothing more than copying and pasting. Even the character designs look like that due to there being some white line around their limbs. I can't say if you been copying everything or not. If so, learn to draw out your characters, props, etc. And if you are not, then be careful on how you draw.
2. Speaking of drawing, please make at least a few more backgrounds instead of just using the same one in different shots. Especially at the end with everybody outside. It makes you look lazy.
3. There are some parts that went on for too long, especially with that awkward black joke. 13 seconds of dead air is not funny.
4. I recommend you learn how to do animation fps instead of tweening everything. Although I have seen tween animation done good before, this is not how to do it. So please try a different animation style.
Now I do give you a 2/5 rating because there is some good in this. The voice acting is good-ish for the most part, although I think it could be improved with the help of Audacity. And the lip-sync is actually pretty spot on! But that's really about it. Everything else holds you back. Now I understand you are a beginner animator, so please take my advice and try to improve. You do have potential, so I really hope you make good quality in the near future. Good luck!
Thank you very much for your criticism. I currently use Anime Studio, which isn't very good for animating, especially for artists that like drawing their characters and props, etc. I drew everything in Photoshop aside from the Shotgun, I'm attempting re-draw all the characters and such and make them look more crisp. I hope to branch out into Flash or ToonBoom in the very close future. Sadly right now I am currently stuck with this, mainly because my computer sucks and can't handle anything.
Again, thank you very much. I really do appreciate it.
Pretty much just an animator for fun! Hope you enjoy my content!
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Joined on 6/13/14